Question

Dobrze jest napisana ta rozprawka i czy jest odpowiednia ilość słów?

There are more andmore newfactories.All the time isworkingfor the people.But somepeople thinkthat buildingnew factoriesis bad.There are advantagesand disadvantagesbuildingnew factories.

There are several benefitsofbuildingfactories.Firstly, peoplehave jobs.Thanks to the workpeople cankeep theirfamilies.Secondlyin the houseswarm.People do notfreeze.

But there arealso disadvantagesbuildingfactoriesFirstly, the workin the factoryis dangerous.People candie.Disastercan arise.Secondly is the polluted air.People andanimalsget sick.Thirdlymany treesaresheared.There arefewer and fewerplants.

In conclusionthere are moredisadvantages than advantagesto build newfactories.I do not thinkwell, thatcreateda newfactory.It isharmful to humans.

Answer 1

Słów jest o wiele za mało. Tylko 131, a rozprawka w języku angielskim powinna mieć od 200-250 słów. Pogrubione słówka to takie, które powinny znaleźć się w rozprawce. Poprawiłem ;) Jedyną wadą jest powtarzanie wyrazu factory/factories ^^ Budowa rozprawki wygląda następująco :

* 4 paragrafy :

1 -wstęp

2 - zalety

3 - wady

4 - podsumowanie

 

    Currently, there are more and more new factories. In the whole world there are a lot of various kinds of it. Thanks to the factories we have heat, light and much more. This is very useful and necessary in live of every each person. However, the majority of people think that building new factories is improper. There are advantages and disadvantages of building new factories as outlined below (jak przedstawiono poniżej).

     There are certain benefits of building factories. To start with, people who don’t work, they might get a job. Secondly, if they work they are able to support family financially and start living like the average person - without poverty.

 

     Nevertheless, building new factories entails a few negative aspects. Firstly, this work is highly hazardous. By poisoning or something like that people might die. Secondly, if nothing is done in this case, emissions from these factories pollute the atmosphere. Last but not least, the air can be contaminated for many years and living there might be not possible.

     Taking everything into consideration, although building new factories has a few pros, it also has many cons. I, personally, believe that this isn't the best solution. Factories cause much damage, but are essential in everyday life . Probably none of us would not be able to live without electricity for example.

 

220 słów ;)