Prosze o sprawdzenie poprawnosci gramatycznej opowiadania oraz przeksztalceniu kilku zdan na czas past perfect a takze zastapieniu when bo zbyt czesto uzywane (mam tam kilka ale nie wiem czy sa poprawne gramatycznie )
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Sandra lived with her father in a small city near Zakopane .
The weren't rich but lived together and were happy .
One cold day when Sandra wanted to get warm by the fireplace she noticed that there is no wood , so she went in to the forest search for some wood.
Sandar walked forest ptah beetween trees . Sudeenly she had heared the rustle of broken braches and felt a strong blow to the head .
When she woke up she was lying on the concrete in a dark room .
Her hands and feets were bound . When se had looked areound she saw a small candle and a note with the word's ''In an hour I will be back it's already the end of the game''
When she cut the rope , she carefully stood up and began to look for the door . She had took a candle and went to the walk .She found the door when sudeenly a strong gust of wind blew out the candle . At the door she saw a man in dirty dark cloack . He held the knife in his hand. Sandra stared to scream ...
The corpse of Sandra was found a few day's later , but the murderer never was punished .
Sandra lived with her father in a small city near Zakopane .
They weren't rich but lived together and were happy .
One cold day when Sandra wanted to get warm by the fireplace she noticed that there weren't wood , so she went in to the forest search for some wood.
Sandar walked to the forest beetween trees . Sudeenly she had heared the rustle of broken braches and felt a strong blow to the head .
When she woke up she was lying on the concrete in a dark room .
Her hands and feets were bound (Nie wiem w jakim kontekscie mialo byc te bound) . When se had looked areound she saw a small candle and a note with the word's ''In an hour I will be back it's already the end of the game''
When she cut the rope , she carefully stood up and began to look for the door . She had took a candle and went to the walk .She found the door when sudeenly a strong gust of wind blew out the candle . At the door she saw a man in dirty dark cloack . He held the knife in his hand. Sandra stared to scream ...
The corpse of Sandra was found a few day's later , but the murderer never was punished .
Tekst bardzo dobry i ciekawy! :) np.tu nie mozesz uzyc past perfect, mozesz zastapic: when she had looked... na : She was looking around and then, she saw a small candle... . She was really frightened. ... reszta naprawde dobrze no i mozesz jeszcze zamienic cloack na coat jakos lepiej wyglada i brzmi :D Pozdrawiam i zycze sukcesu! no i jeszcze there was no wood , chociaz wersja kolegi tez jest poprawna