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I would like to tell you about my old friend, which I met about ten years ago, when I was at primary school. Her name was Kate and she was so funny, that nobody could be bored with she.
In appearance she didn’t differ from other children, because she was very small and slim. She had also long, brown hair and green, shiny eyes. In my opinion she was very beauty but I saw that only when I knew her more.
She almost always wore red or orange T-shirts and green or blue trousers.
As for her personality, she was very sociable and cheerful. She had so many ideas on one minute that I usually didn't keep up with her.
I remember ours first meet. In the classroom I didn't know where sit and, accidentally, I've choosen place beside she. Kate at once tried to talk with me. I was surprised how direct she was, but I liked exactly that feature in hers character.
If I remember well, she liked dancing and reading. These two things were really important for Kate.
I really liked her. She was my first and best, even now, friend. We always entertained together very well. I could trust her entirely. Unfortunately, when we have finished school and we went to another high schools, ours connection was weaker and weaker with each year. But for sure I will never forget her. I'm sure that world would be better if there would be more people like she.
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Jest pare błędów, ale niewiele :)
I would like to tell you about my old friend that I met about ten years ago, when I was at primary school. Her name was Kate and she was so funny (tu bez przecinka!) that nobody could have been bored with her.
Her appearance didn’t differ from the other childrens', because she was very small and slim. She also had long, brown hair and green, shiny eyes. In my opinion, she was very beautiful but I saw that when I got to know her better.
She almost always wore red or orange T-shirts and green or blue trousers.
As far as her personality is concerned, she was very sociable and cheerful. She had so many ideas during one minute that I usually didn't keep up with her.
I remember our first meeting. I didn't know where to sit in the classroom, when accidentally I've choosen place beside her. At once Kate tried to talk to me. I was surprised how direct she was, but I really liked that feature in her character.
If I remember well, she liked dancing and reading. These two things were really important for Kate.
I really liked her. She was my first and best, even now, friend. We always had great time when we were together. I could trust her entirely. Unfortunately, when we finished school and we went to another high schools, we slowly lost contact. However, for sure I will never forget her. I'm sure that the world would be better if there were more people like her.