Popraw błędy (głównie czasy) lub zastąp wyrażenia tak, aby były one jednolitym, poprawnym opowiadaniem. Uzasadnij wprowadzone zmiany. Ilość słów 200-250 (Punktów jest sporo- sam oceń, że bardziej warto się postarać i zrobić to dokładnie, niż stracić te punkty od razu, gdy zgłoszę błędne). Możesz totalnie zmienić składnie, budowę, zdania, byle sens został ten sam.
It was in 2009 year. At tenth June I flew to Sri Lanka. This holidays was supposed to be incredible. I haven`t thinked that here will happen this horrific event.
Three first days in Sri Lanka was really curious. I have saw very interesting places in Sri Lanka, for example the national museum of Colombo, Colombo Dutch Museum, Colombo Fortress and Kelaniya Raja Maha Vihara. In third day of my tour I went on the beach. I swam in Indian Ocean, I tanned and I played the volleyball. Circa five p.m. I would return to the hotel. Ridding, I have seen a giant wave. Maybe it wasn`t a tsunami, but was above five meters high! I was very scared. I can`t feel anything at the moment. Our bus crashed with trees. Almost everybody died. I and rest of survivors were under the water. Some peoples had no legs. Splinters of glass hurt our eyes and skin. Luckily few seconds later the water level came down and we could breath. Then I fell into a swoon. I waked up three days later in small, untidy hospital. I thinked that I must return to Poland. Few days later I have been in Warsaw.
I am healthy now, but I will nevermore go to Sri Lanka or other Asian country.
Nie wiedziałam, w jakim języku mają być objaśnienia, więc są trochę mieszane;) mogę poprawić albo uzupełnić jeśli będzie trzeba.
It was in 2009. – We do not use the word “year” in English as we do in Polish.
On June 10th I flew to Sri Lanka. – dates collocate with the preposition “on”. We write dates using numbers, not words. We only read them differently
These holidays were supposed to be incredible. – Holidays is plural
I haven’t thought that a horrific event would happen there. – thought is the correct 3rd form of “think”; further part of this sentence is in reported speech, because we are reporting our thoughts from the past.
Three first days in Sri Lanka was really interesting. – “curious” refers only to people, e.g. “I’m curious what he thinks of me”
I saw very interesting places in Sri Lanka, for example the national museum of Colombo, Colombo Dutch Museum, Colombo Fortress and Kelaniya Raja Maha Vihara. – Past Simple, because we know when it was.
On the third day of my tour I went to the beach. – “on” – jak wyżej, “the” – there was only one third day of the trip, “to” – direction, refers to movement.
I swam in the Indian Ocean, I sunbathed and I played the volleyball. – “the” – with names, “tan” is a result, “sunbathing” is a process.
About five p.m. I returned to the hotel. – Past Simple, because we know when. About is stylistically better in this context.
On my way, I saw a giant wave. – Action that took place during another action points to Past Continuous + Past Simple. Zamiast Past Cont. użyłam wyrażenia “po drodze”, bo z wcześniejszego tekstu nie wynika, czym bohater jedzie;)
Maybe it wasn’t a tsunami, but it was above five meters high! – subject is required in both parts of the sentence.
I was very scared. - ok
I can’t feel anything at the moment.
Our bus crashed into trees. – with byłoby ok, gdyby drzewa też się ruszały
Almost everybody died. – ok
Me and the rest of survivors were under the water for some time. – dodałam “for some time” dla spójności tekstu
Some people had no legs. peoples – narody, people – ludzie (correct plural form for an irregular noun)
Splinters of glass hurt our eyes and skin. – ok
Luckily a few seconds later the water level came down and we could breath. few – mało, a few – kilka
Then I fell into a swoon. – chyba “I swooned away”, ale tu nie jestem pewna
I woke up three days later in small, untidy hospital. – correct past form of the verb
I thought that I had to return to Poland. – jak wyżej
A few days later I was in Warsaw. – few jak wyżej, czas Past Simple (wiemy kiedy)
I am healthy now, but I will never go to Sri Lanka or any other Asian country again. – poprawniej stylistycznie