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Postacią dla mnie ważną jest Sherlock Holmes, który jest bohaterem powieści Arthura Conan Doyle'a. Podziwiam go za jego inteligencję, umiejętność dedukcji i spostrzegawczość. Uważam, że to bardzo oryginalna, ciekawa postać. Sherlock to ekscentryk, który zna się na psychologii, chemii, kryminologi, interesuje boksem i gra na skrzypcach. Jest uzależniony od tytoniu, morfiny i kokainy. Moim ulubionym Sherlockiem jest Sherlock grany przez Jeremy'ego Bretta. Lubię Holmesa za jego poglądy, twierdził, że w należy przejmować się rzeczami, które naprawdę przydadzą nam się w życiu i nie zaprzątać sobie głowy innymi, tylko pozornie ważnymi sprawami.


A important character for me is Sherlock Holmes who is the main character of novel by Arthur Conan Doyle. I adore Sherlock for his intelligence, art of deduction and observation, secrecy and depressive and obsessive personality. Sherlock it's an eccentric who is good at psychology, chemistry and criminology, he is interested in boxing and playing the violin. He is addicet to tobacco, morphine and cocaine. I think it's a very original, interesting character. My favourite Sherlock Holmes is Sherlock played by Jeremy Brett. I also love Sherlock for his original and right views.

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Błędy w tłumaczeniu :

 

"A important character" - an important character

"I adore Sherlock for his intelligence, art of deduction and observation, secrecy and depressive and obsessive personality." - zbyt liczne powtórzenia "and"

"Sherlock it's an eccentric who is good at psychology" - is nie it's

". He is addicet to tobacco, morphine and cocaine." - addicted nie addicet

" I think it's a very original, interesting character." - he's nie it's

Moja wersja tłumaczenia:

The character which is very imporant for me is Sherlock holmes who is the main hero of the novel by Arthur Conan Doyle. I admire him for his intelligence, his ability of deduciton and perceptibility. From my perspective he is a very interesting and original character. He is an eccentric type of person who has knowledge about psychology, chemistry and criminology. His passions are boxing and playing the violin. He is also addicted to tobacco, morphine and cocaine. My favourite Sherlock that ever appeared in a movie was the one played by Jeremy Brett. I like Holmes for his views, he stated that we should worry only about the things that will come of use to us in the future and that we shouldn't pay attention to other things that only seem important.