Question

Proszę o poprawienie błędów!
Dear Sir od Madame,

I am writing to express my opinion about an article titled: "You don't what buy ypur child? BUY DOG!", which I was reading in the monday edition of your newspaper.

I am most disappointed about this idea. First of all it is not toy as a result it should be to reasonable decision. I was was most embarassed, what is more she is psychologist and she approved my opinion.

Dogs are real animals, who can love and feel the same way like us. Children often change and bored their flatlies, so parents have to look after pets. Often they don't want to, consequently dogs go to shelter.

In conclusion I hope that I am ot only one who thinks like that at the same time I bielieve that every reader thinks about it.

Futhermore I hope that publisher publish my letter, I trust that everybody doesn't scared to express yourself opinion.

Answer 1

Literówki: or, nie od, your, nie ypur,
"Which I read in the Monday (...)"
Po first of all przecinek. Tu lepiej powtórzyć "The dog" is not a toy i tak dalej. Zamiast as a result, mogłoby być zwykłe "so".
It should be a reasonable decision (bez to)
Nie rozumiem zdania: " I was was most embarassed, what is more she is psychologist and she approved my opinion." Nie wiem skąd ta psycholożka i jaka jest Twoja opinia.
Następny akapit bez "real". W końcu nie ma sztucznych zwierząt. "The same way AS us". To tak częściowo