Tematem zadania jest napisanie pracy na temat spędzonych ferii, przy czym oceniane jest słownictwo, gramatyka oraz zastosowane czasy (min. 3 przeszłe). Wypracowanie już napisałem, więc chodzi mi tylko o sprawdzenie poprawności i ewentualnie (jeśli będzie taka potrzeba) zaproponowanie stosowniejszych sformułowań zamiast tych wykorzystanych w tekście (np. zastąpienie powtórzeń). Termin - do końca jutrzejszego dnia (niedzieli). Za pomoc z góry dziękuję.
I spent my whole winter holidays with my family. We stayed together at home for most of our free time.
In the first week, I played several computer games, but none of them was enough intriguing to keep me in front of my new laptop for a long period of time. Probably this situation was caused by specific kind of these games, which were quite old, too. My brother also played some computer games on our personal computer, but we played different games, so while he was playing the game, which title was “Grand Theft Auto San Andreas”, I was playing Role Playing Games (RPG) such as “The Elder Scrolls IV” and “Fallout 3”. Definitely, I was really disappointed with this activity, because I had been expecting something more from it.
In the second week, I watched a film trilogy, which was called “The Lord of the Rings”. It was consisted of three fantasy adventure movies based on the three-volume book of the same name by J. R. R. Tolkien. The films were “The Fellowship of the Ring”, “The Two Towers” and “The Return of the King”. Moreover, this videos weren’t Theatrical Edition, but Extended. It meant that trilogy was over 100 minutes longer than normal version and the entire plot was set in full HD resolution! However, I had some overwhelming problems, which involved my comfort of watching this particular saga. These troubles concerned low video frame rate and poor audio quality, which were caused by too weak processor, which was in my laptop. Well, I had to use my father’s computer instead of mine. After I had watched the trilogy I was rather pleased. These movies were fantastic and gorgeous with new scenes and high performance, which included special effects and advanced video output. During my winter holidays, I took also part in other minor acts, but they weren’t enough substantial to be mentioned in my description.
In conclusion, I spent a wonderful time on my “short holidays”, in spite of I didn’t nothing special. There were also some bad experiences, but they didn’t affect my overall evaluation of past events.
I spent [my/the] whole winter holidays with my family. We stayed together at home for most of our free time.
In the first week, I played several computer games, but none of them was enough intriguing to keep me in front of my new laptop for a long period of time. Probably this situation was caused by specific kind of these games, which were quite old, too. My brother also played some computer games on our personal computer, but we played different games, so while he was playing the game, [which title was/called//which is called] “Grand Theft Auto San Andreas”, I was playing Role Playing Games (RPG) such as “The Elder Scrolls IV” and “Fallout 3”. Definitely, I was really disappointed with this activity, because I had [been expecting/expected] something more from it.
In the second week, I watched a film trilogy, which was called “The Lord of the Rings”. It [was consisted/consists] of three fantasy adventure movies based on the three-volume book [of the same name/under the same title] by J. R. R. Tolkien. The films were “The Fellowship of the Ring”, “The Two Towers” and “The Return of the King”. Moreover, this videos weren’t Theatrical Edition, but Extended. It [meant/means] that [the] trilogy was over 100 minutes longer than normal version and the entire plot was set in full HD [resolution]! However, I had some overwhelming problems, [which involved/which lowered] my comfort of watching this particular saga. These troubles concerned low video frame rate and poor audio quality, which were caused by too weak processor, [which was] in my laptop. Well, I had to use my father’s computer instead of mine. After I had watched the trilogy I was rather pleased. These movies were fantastic and gorgeous with new scenes and high [level of] performance, which included special effects and advanced video output. During my winter holidays, I [took also part/also took part] in other minor [acts/activities - to nie to samo], but they weren’t [enough substantial/substential enough] to be mentioned in my description.
In conclusion, I spent a wonderful time on my “short holidays”, [in spite of I didn’t nothing special/but I didn't DO anything special]. There were also some bad experiences [sprawdź czy experience nie jest tylko w l. poj.], but they didn’t affect my overall evaluation of past events.
Wyrazy wzięte w nawias pomiń, te które są w nawiasie i po ukośniku zastąpione innymi zastąp, a podkreślone usuń. Błędy są minimalne a nie gwarantuję że masz to w 100% dobrze bo też się uczę jeszcze... Everyone makes mistakes, we're just human-beings :D.