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Let's look at some examples of bad SF/fantasy dialog. I made these up, but you can have fun and sharpen your "ear" for dialog by finding similar examples. You sometimes can find problematic dialog in professionally published work, but you're most likely to find it in e-zines that don't pay their authors. If you're in a writers' group, look for problem dialog in the drafts submitted for critique. And, of course, take a hard look at the dialog in your own work! Kneeling Elk dismounted. "I am being honored greeting you," he said in his native tongue. "You have been sitting many long time?" I was glad I'd lived with his people and had learned the language. In his native tongue, which our narrator claims to understand well, Kneeling Elk is undoubtedly more fluent than he appears here. Fortunately, English is a flexible language that can, even in translation, capture cultural nuances. Thus, the fact that Kneeling Elk is "honored" rather than "pleased" or "happy" or just, like, "Hey, man! Whassup?" tells us something. We have another opportunity with "many long time." "Many moons" and "many turnings of the sun" are clichéd, but let's say our characters are meeting next to a stream in the autumn. Then, to give us a sense of how his culture perceives the passage of time, we might have him say, "Have you seen many leaves float past?" Or a different cultural clue would be given by, "Have you had to eat alone?" Brzzzt crawled closer. I could feel her carrion-laced breath on my face. "Zzz zzzzz zz z z z zzzzzzz!" She wanted me to follow her. If this is all that Brzzzt says in this story, the Z approach may be okay. In a humorous story, it may even add something. However, if Brzzzt is a talkative giant fly, do we really want to read through lines of Zs followed by echoes in English? Brzzzt buzzes -- just tell me that she buzzes, or have us hear a buzzing fly-to-fly conversation going on in the background somewhere. Then give the rest to me in translation. Altheor knelt at Princess O'Sopretty's feet and touched his lips to the silver embroidery on the hem of her green silk gown. "Would that I deservéd but the merest whisper of thine sweet breath upon mine ear." She leaned forward, cupped his unshaven chin in her dainty palm, and lifted his face towards hers. "Nay, lady!" He sprang back. "Your lips do tempt mine, but my lips may not have such commerce as they desireth, for at the feast tonight, your father did serve of the garlic most abundantly, and my breath be most foul." It's not unusual for authors attempting high fantasy to put high-falutin' words in their characters' mouths, in the mistaken notion that such dialog will impart a majesty to their characters and setting. "But Tolkien does it!" True: J.R.R. Tolkien does use such language, sparingly, when regal characters are in the most formal or grave of circumstances. And Tolkien had a background in linguistics and knew what he was doing. As a rule, don't try to write in the English of the Bible or of Shakespeare unless you can write it to that standard. And even then, don't overdo it.
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NisRinaAre we experiencing a rise in speculative design projects that occur outside client relationships? What is the role of speculation in funding design projects in New York? Isn’t every design project speculative by nature? Why is engagement in speculative projects the only standing taboo within graphic design? Event is in the 10th floor loft. Refreshments will be served in the lobby immediately following the discussion. Mimi Chun Design Director, General Assembly
Natasha Chandani Designer Co-author, “Thanks for the View, Mr Mies”
Gary Chou General Manager, Union Square Ventures Network Faculty, SVA Interaction Design
Glen Cummings Principal, MTWTF
Jack Henrie Fisher Designer, Faculty at Parsons / New School Former researcher, Jan Van Eyck Academie
Event is in the 10th floor loft. Refreshments will be served in the lobby immediately following the discussion.
Mimi Chun
Design Director, General Assembly
Natasha Chandani
Designer
Co-author, “Thanks for the View, Mr Mies”
Gary Chou
General Manager,
Union Square Ventures Network
Faculty, SVA Interaction Design
Glen Cummings
Principal, MTWTF
Jack Henrie Fisher
Designer, Faculty at Parsons / New School
Former researcher, Jan Van Eyck Academie
John Kudos
Designer and Speculator, Studio Kudos