Question

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Dear Editor,

I am John Stakovic, a third year student at the University of Film in Oxford. I am writing to express my disagreement about closing club of debating films.

First of all, I would say about important role of club debating in the life of many university students. This club was created one hundred years ago and has a rich tradition. Josh Schwarz himself was involved to lead this club. Firstly, this club gives place to discussion for students and an opportunity to exchange views and experiences about the films which they saw or which wish to see. Secondly, it is good space to meet new friends and making an own short films.

Many graduates still interested in this debating club. Furthermore a few of them became a famous people. I would encourage another students to present their opinion on club of discuss films.

I hope that thanks to their support the club will not be closed.

Yours faithfully,

XYZ

Answer 1

Dear Editor,

I am John Stakovic, a third year student at the University of Film in Oxford. I am writing to express my disagreement about closing club of debating films.

First of all, I would like to say about the important role of club debating in the life of many university students. This club was created one hundred years ago and has a rich tradition. Josh Schwarz himself was involved to lead this club. Firstly, this club gives a place to discuss for students  and an opportunity to exchange views and experiences about the films which they saw or which wish to see. Secondly, it is good space to meet new friends and to make  own short films.

Many graduates are  still interested in this debating club. Furthermore a few of them become famous people. I would encourage other students to present their opinion about the club of discuss films.

I hope that thanks to their support the club will not be closed.

Yours faithfully,

XYZ

 

Male bledy ale i tak poprawilem jak ja mysle:P