Question

Tolong benarkan jika ada yang salah dari teks di bawah ini ya??

Good morning ladies and gentleman
I am Ningrum and i'll bring you some informations of the events ghat happened in this week on "Shinichi neews on the weekend".
The first information is about Tornado at Monday, November 17th 2014 in Osaka, Japan.
This tornado was began at 02:36pm to 02:43pm. It's about 360 builds was broken, 27 humans was killed and 58 humans in missing by this tornado.
And Heiji Hattori or someone who called 'detective from west' also hurt and he's in Beika Hospital to get the treatment now.

We're move to the second news.
This is about the war of Israel and Gaza that destroyed 5 Gaza's mosques until now and the cause is a big bomb from the Israel.
Because of this event, not only the mosques, but also the school, football field and the others build was broken by Israel's bomb.

Answer 1

"This tornado was began..." -> "This tornado began at..."
"360 builds..." -> "360 buildings..."
"27 humans was killed" -> "27 humans killed..."
"58 humans in missing..." -> "58 humans is missing..."
tambahan "or someone who called" bisa diganti "a.k.a" (as known as)
"we're move" -> "we're moving"
"the others build" -> "the others buildings"

CMIIW  d(^-^)

Answer 2

1. i'll give you some informations that happened
2. tornado began at 02:36pm-02.43. there was 360 buildings was broken, 27 people died and 58 people missing.

mungkin itu ajah yang aku tau ^^