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apa ada kesalahan tensis? verb? penulisan? atau apapun
(narrative text)
Name : Jimmy Aldeo
Class : X. IPS 2
New Year’s Holiday
On the New Year’s holiday, my family and i went swim in the swimming pool water world mekarsari. We left home at 8 o’clock and arrived in the water world mekarsari at 8.30 am. We were going by car, that is driven by my father. The streets in the new year this time not as usually, which is usually jammed but not this time.
After obtained a parking place, we immediately brought clothes and food into the swimming pool. Before getting into the swimming pool, we had to queues for a ticket first. Unexpected the queue is so long, so we had to wait for mother who queues for almost an hour to buy entrance ticket.
After we entered into the swimming pool, we had to find a place to put a bag of clothes and our food and finally, we obtained shady place.
After that, we started swimming at 9.30 am and enjoyed all the water rides in it. At 1 pm, we break for lunch. My mother prepared food that is brought from home. After lunch, we went back to swim again until 4 pm. At 4 pm, we stoped swimming, took a shower and changing clothes. After that we went back home.
I really enjoyed my holiday with family. That’s the exciting story of my vacation, sorry if there is an mistake in writing. Thank you for your attention.
apa ada kesalahan tensis? verb? penulisan? atau apapun
(narrative text)
Name : Jimmy Aldeo
Class : X. IPS 2
New Year’s Holiday
On the New Year’s holiday, my family and i went swim in the swimming pool water world mekarsari. We left home at 8 o’clock and arrived in the water world mekarsari at 8.30 am. We were going by car, that is driven by my father. The streets in the new year this time not as usually, which is usually jammed but not this time.
After obtained a parking place, we immediately brought clothes and food into the swimming pool. Before getting into the swimming pool, we had to queues for a ticket first. Unexpected the queue is so long, so we had to wait for mother who queues for almost an hour to buy entrance ticket.
After we entered into the swimming pool, we had to find a place to put a bag of clothes and our food and finally, we obtained shady place.
After that, we started swimming at 9.30 am and enjoyed all the water rides in it. At 1 pm, we break for lunch. My mother prepared food that is brought from home. After lunch, we went back to swim again until 4 pm. At 4 pm, we stoped swimming, took a shower and changing clothes. After that we went back home.
I really enjoyed my holiday with family. That’s the exciting story of my vacation, sorry if there is an mistake in writing. Thank you for your attention.
satrianipuspita
Ngak ada coba deh cek lagi
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tetehtia16
In the new year holiday...... , that was driven by my father....... unexpected the queue was so long...... food that was brought from home...... sorry if there is a mistaken.........
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tetehtia16
and this kind of text isnt narratuve text but recount text