Question

Sprawdzić błędy . Poprawić, ewentualnie coś dodać . To miało być krótkie opowiadanie z użyciem czasów przeszłych .

Anna had to get up early the next day, so she set her alarm for 5 a.m. At 8 a.m she had planned a flight to LA for her favorite band’s concert. She was so exacting, that she couldn’t sleep. In the morning she had eaten breakfast for one hour before she went an airport. There Anna sat on a chair, because she was very tired and exhausted. She decided to wait for control. unfortunately She fell asleep and missed a flight. She was so furious and depressed, that she caught a chance, first plane. It turned out that this is the flight to Island and it was very dangerous. But Anna was already on a board. The girl was very scared but stewardess told her to calm down. She sat on a chair and was looking out through a window. After few hours in the window appeared a big volcano, which was erupting. Near hers window had shown clouds of smoke when Anna started to scream. Hers own cry woke her up in her own bed at five to five a.m.

Answer 1

At 8 a.m she had planned a flight to LA for her favorite band’s concert. - czemu czas zaprzeszly? ja bym tu dala po prostu past simple
She sat on a chair and was looking out through a window - po pierwsze The window i the chair bo to konkretne okno i krzeslo. Rozbiłabym to na dwa zdania. she sat on the chair. She was looking out... bo to brzmi jakos dziwnie jakby sie patrzyla przez to okno tylko w momencie jak usiadla.
After few hours - after A few... (few - niewiele, a few-kilka)
Near hers window had shown clouds of smoke when Anna started to scream - near heR window she could see clouds of smoke and then she started to scream.
Hers own cry - heR