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Simon Smith, 26, was attacked by a shark while surffing at Second Beach. The incident took place last Sunday. Luckily the beach was crowded. A witness called an ambulance when they saw somebody escapes from shark.| Simon told us: When I saw a fin of shark's between two huge waves I swam towards shore, but I wasn't made it. When the shark bit off half the my surfboard I grabbed second half and stuffed into his mouth. Afterwords Simon had a few scratches and he is recovering from shock in South Shore Hospital.

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Answer 1

Simon Smith, 26, was attacked by a shark while he was surffing at Second Beach. The incident took place last Sunday. Luckily the beach was crowded, and a witness called an ambulance, when they saw somebody escapes from shark. Simon told us: When I saw a fin of shark's between two huge waves I swam towards shore, but I did not docked. When the shark bit off half my surfboard I grabbed second half and stuffed into his mouth. Afterwords Simon had a few scratches and he is recovering from shock in South Shore Hospital.

 

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Answer 2

Simon Smith, 26, was attacked by a shark while he was surffing at Second Beach. The incident happend last Sunday. Luckily the beach was crowded. Witnesses called an ambulance just when they saw that somebody is escaping from shark. Simon told us: "When I saw shark's fin between two huge waves I was trying to swam towards the shore, but I wasn't made it. When the shark bit half of my surfboard I grabbed second half and stuffed it into his mouth."

Afterwards, Simon had a few scratches and now he is recovering from the shock in South Shore Hospital.

 

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