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Two days ago in my older brother school girl obtained unusual prize. The girl name is Veronica, she’s very pretty and clever, she worked in holiday as life-guard and she looked amazing in a bikini. In this school was competition for the most beautiful girl. In competition participated a lot of nice girls. Competition has three parts. There are three judges who gave marks from 0 to 10. In first part schoolgirls show himself in eveningdresses and they must dance Viennese waltz, here the best result obtained black hair girl (Manuela) with very nice eyes she has been wear in black skirt with white big bow, she got 10 points. In next part girls has been wear in tight sports outfit and they beenspilled into thewater and ran around the scene. In this part the best was Angela, she got 10 points of course. In last part girls has been wear in bikini and they must pole dance. This part won Veronica and she won the competition with 28 points. The next day the school held a solemn appeal. Head teacher asked Veronica and he gave her unusual prize: pink thong, diploma and diamond crown. Veronica thanks director and all people in school asked her for last dance and she did it!
bledy:
in my older brother's school
on holiday
showed herself
Manuela,girl with black hair, with nice eyes.She has ...