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Dear Mayor,
I am writing to express my disappointment disappointment with the liquidate our park and build there new shopping center, and i want to write my proposition solve this problem.
In our city decided to destroy the park and build there new shopping center. In my opinion it is bad idea because in our town we do not have a lot of places to rest. Many parents go there to walk with kids and a lot of older people are spending there time. Our city is industrial so the park is a last place where we can find some the natural environment. If someone wanted to entertainment, will have to go to cinema or club, but i know a lot of people who want to rest in natural places like our park and they will be disappointed like me.
In my opinion the best option will be build this shopping center on the outskirts of the city. In our town we have excellent public transport so problems with getting there won't be. Therefore our park will be saved, and the people who want shopping center will be happy.
I hope my proposition will be considered positively, and our last place where we can find some natural environment will be saved.
Your faithfully Jan Kowalski
Dear Mayor,
I am writing to express my disappointment disappointment with the liquidate our park and build there new shopping center, and i want to write my proposition solve this problem.
In our city decided to destroy the park and build there new shopping center. In my opinion it is bad idea because in our town we do not have a lot of places to rest. Many parents go there to walk with kids and a lot of older people are spending there time. Our city is industrial so the park is a last place where we can find some the natural environment. If someone wanted to entertainment, will have to go to cinema or club, but i know a lot of people who want to rest in natural places like our park and they will be disappointed like me.
In my opinion the best option will be build this shopping center on the outskirts of the city. In our town we have excellent public transport so problems with getting there won't be. Therefore our park will be saved, and the people who want shopping center will be happy.
I hope my proposition will be considered positively, and our last place where we can find some natural environment will be saved.
Your faithfully Jan Kowalski
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I am writing to express my disappointment REGARDING / CONCERNING THE liquidatION OF our park and buildING there A new shopping center. I WOULD LIKE TO MY SOLUTION TO this problem.
OUR CITY'S AUTHORITIES HAVE decided to destroy the park and build there A new shopping center. In my opinion it is bad idea because in our CITY THERE ARE NOT MANY / ENOUGH places to rest. Many parents go there to TAKE THEIR CHILDREN FOR A WOALK and a lot of older people ALSO spend time there. IT IS AN INDUSTRIAL CITY THEREFORE the park is THE last place where we can find some natural environment. If someone wantS entertainment THEY CAN to go to cinema or A club, but I know a lot of people who want to rest in natural places SUCH AS our park will be disappointed AS I AM.
In my opinion the best SOLUTION WOULD be / IS TO build this shopping center on the outskirts of the city. Our CITY HAS AN excellent public transport so PEOPLE WON'T FIND IT DIFFICULT TO GET REACH / GET TO THE PARK, IN THIS MANNER THE park will be saved, and the people who want / OPT FOR A shopping center will be happy / SATISFIED.
I hope my OFFER will be considered AS A VALUABLE ONE, and our last place, where we can find some natural environment will be saved.
Your faithfully Jan Kowalski
2. W pierwszej linijsce dopisać "of" po "liquidate".
3. W drugiej linijsce "build" zamienić na "building"
4. Po "there" dopisać "a"
5. "Proposition solve this problem" zamień na "proposition of solving this problem"
6. "Our city decided", bez tego "in"
7. "and to build"
8. W piątej linijce po "is" dodaj "a"
9. W siódmej linijce zamień kolejnością "time" i "there"
10.W ósmej po "some" usuń to "the"
11. "to entertainment" zamień na "to have fun", a po przecinku wstaw osobę "he" albo "she"
12. W dziewiątej usuń "who"
13. W jedenastej po "be" zapiś "to"
14. W dwunastej zamień zdanie na "(...) so there won't be trouble with getting anywhere"
15. W trzynajstej po "want" wstaw "to"