Potrzebowałabym kogoś kto sprawdzi i poprawi mi tą oto recenzje pewnego fanficka
Have you ever get something from friend, family, stranger for safekeeping? If your answer it is yes, you must know this wonderful feel, luck, due the fact that someone us trust. In total similar feel is then someone say to us the top secret. The fact, that you can’t tell about this nobody makes that you are feel special. Because you are special. You know something but other people don’t know anything about this secret. Or you have something, and you can’t show this even your best friend and you can’t tell about this nobody. You must guard this because this aren’t your, so you go after because you can’t disappoint person, who trust you.
Exactly with similar problem tends Rarity in fanfuction entitled "the box". She worked in her shop, already had to close but came to her a stranger pony. He wasn’t pretty and good-looking, he even look suspiciously and she don’t trust him. Stranger ask her that she look after on his box. She want to refuse but see something in his eyes, this order her take a box. He told her that she can’t open this box and leaves shop. He told yet that he came quickly for pick up this box but… silent! No, I can’t tell what will happen next, you must read this story.So, miss Rarity is narrator and we experiance her adeventure together with her. We don’t know exactly happeng because this is write as diary. And in this diary are only very important events, most of all are feelings and emotions mane character. Great. Author very good takes on Rarity. Yes, on Rarity. She is stereotypical women: hysterical, she makes a problem with anything etc. Exactly he describes emotions and mental states mane character because she change day by day.
A huge plus in this fanfiction is climate. Tensity grow up of line per line and this is very cool. Nature Rarity is change, on the start she is exactly just like on the My little pony: friendship is magic and she change on account of some events. This story is very interasting and reader when finsh read this think about happen, reader ask each other: “what really happened?”
Have you ever got
If your answer is yes (nie it is)
someone trusts us (nie us trust)
is when (nie then)
the secret (lepiej brzmi brze "top" chociaż obie są dobre)
makes that you feel special (bez "are")
you cant even show this to your best friend
because it is not yours (nie this arent yours)
person, who trusts you (nie "trust")
She was working in her shop
then came to her
he even looked
she didnt trust
stranger asked (potem nie ma "that")
She wanted to refuse but she saw something
So, miss Rarity is a narrator and we are the part of her adventure (tak lepiej brzmi, to znaczy,że jesteśmy częścią jej przygody)
We dont know what will happen because it is written as a diary
and this diary is only about a very important events
she makes problems about everything
she is changing day by day
Tensity grows up
this is really great (cool brzmi niedobrze)
Rarity's nature (lepiej brzmi) is changing at the beging sie is...
and she changes
and a reader when finishes reading this thinks
reader asks