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Mógłby ktoś mi sprawdzić tą pracę, czy jest bezbłędna, w razie jakiś błędów, proszę o poprawienie. Z góry dziękuję <3

June 28 it was eagerly awaited by all the end of the school
year. The next day I went with friends to the sea. Way to go was quite long,
but the time passed quickly while gazing at the passing scenery. After a few
hours we were already at the scene . Accommodated at the resort " green
corner " . We unpacked and wybraliśy to the beach. On the way I stopped at
the bulletin board , I saw a list of concerts for the next few days. I read
that 30 June is Black Veil Brides experience and support Blood on the dance
floor . I was very happy . These two teams were my favorite . We've gone to a nearby
store to get tickets, but it turned out that wszyskie are already sold out .
Very upset we got to the beach. We spread a blanket and a screen on which we
sat . Sunbathing suddenly noticed a group of people starting to break down the
stage for tomorrow's concert in the middle of the beach. We came closer , it
was quite a big fuss . Bodyguards forbidden to enter the area as security
goals. We decided to go back . When we returned to the resort, suddenly drove
past a large bus in which they were images of the band members. Delineate near
our resort. The door to the bus opened and came out of him, the members of
Black Veil Brides , closely followed by Blood on the dance floor . We could not
believe it , his legs buckled beneath us in the experience . Climbed unsteadily
toward them . Andy - lead singer of Black Veil Brides us, and we saw it with
his band , so he guessed that we BVB ARMY . He came up to us and asked if we're
going to the concert tomorrow . Repulsed , not because I ran out of tickets .
Then came Jayy - vocalist Blood on the dance floor and gave us tickets and
backstage passes . We were very happy , we could not believe it was really
happening . Then came the other team members . We took from them autographs and
we took some pictures with them . In the joy we returned to the resort. The
next day , we woke up pretty early , ate breakfast, prepared for a concert and
began to head towards the beach. We were on site, the earliest of all , so we
took the best seats near the stage . Hour of the start of the concert , fans
began to gather . Shortly after the time of the whole beach was filled with
lots of screaming fans . Were the first to Blood on the dance floor . The first
came on the scene soon afterwards Jayy Dahvie , greeted them with thunderous applause
and cheers . They performed the following songs : Rise and Shine , Unforgiven ,
Redeemer , I Refuse to Sick , and at the end of one of their latest songs
Unchained , promoting their latest albun Bad Blood . Wszysct a great time.
After a short break, the light began to blink. The smoke machine set sail . CC
walked onto the stage and sat behind the drums . Then came Jake , Jinxx and
Ashley . At the end came the Andes. He said a few words wpowadzających . Later,
he began energetically CC hit the drums , Ashley along with Jake and Jinxx
started playing the guitar , and Andy started singing Let you down . They
performed all the songs from the new album Wretched and Divine Story of the
wild ones . At the end of Knives and Pens have done on this , however, did not
stop there , because the fans demanded bissu . After a few hours spent playing
together with their idols concert is over. Members of both teams came out even
to meet with the fans. Then they left to continue his tour. However, I along
with my friends after a few days sunbathing on the beach back home. These
holidays include some of the best . For sure we will never forget this
incredible happiness that we met , we had a chance to meet our idols.

Answer 1

Ale  cyfry pisze sie pisemnie pani ci obniży ocenę  twenty-five 

Answer 2

Google translate? :) jak chcesz moge ci pomóc.. ale napisz/dodaj twoja polska wersje tekstu, będzie latwiej tłumaczyć.. bo tutaj dużo błędów.. i troche trudne do ogarnięcia to tłumaczenie ;)