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A TIME WHEN YOUR PARENTS WERE VERY ANGRY WITH YOU ABOUT SOMETHING
I had 16 years old two years ago. I really want to go to a birthday party for a friend. I asked my mother if I could go and she agreed if i get home on 10 p.m. I wore black skirt, white blouse and a lot of jewellery. When I came to the place, were all my friends. We started talking, dancing and singing. I played so well that I wasn't looking at the clock. I was terrified when Kasia told mi that is north. I told Kasia that I have to go and ran to the home. My parents were waiting for me, they were worried and angry. I apologized them for my late, but dad forbid me from home for a week. Now, when I'm getting from the house parents remind me, that i get back on the hour.

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I had 16 years old two years ago - jak piszesz ile masz lat to pisz, albo I had 16 years, albo I was 16 years old. W tym zdaniu najlepiej byłoby Two years ago I was 16 years old.

I really want to go to a birthday party for a friend- jak opisujesz przeszłość to musisz używać czasu przeszłego
I really WANTED to go to my best friends' party.

I asked my mother if I could go and she agreed if i get home on 10 p.m.
Można to rozbić na 2 zdania, ale nie trzeba.
1 zdanie - I asked my mother if I could go and she agreed but only if I get home before 10 pm.
2 zdania - I asked my mother if I could go. She agreed but only if I get home before 10 pm.

I wore black skirt
Chyba miało być zakładać (ubrać) zamiast nosić
I put on black skirt, white blouse and a lot of jewellery.

When I came to the place...
There za miast place
were all all my friends - zakładam,że miało być coś w stylu "...to wszyscy moim przyjacie już tam byli"
When I came to that place, all my friends were already there.
albo
When I came to that place, all my friends have been waiting there.
albo
When I was approaching to that place I realised all my friends have been waiting there.

We started talking, dancing and singing.- Zaczęliśmy rozmawiać, tańczyć i śpiewać (wszystko na raz?)
Chyba lepiej We stated talking. Then we were dancing and singing songs.

I played so well - to byłoby dobra żeby powiedzieć "Grałem tak dobrze,że..."
Zakładam, że chodziło o dobrą zabawę. Dobrze się bawić - having a good/great time.
I was having such a good time. I wasn't even looking at the clock.
albo
I was having such a good time that I didn't even look at the clock.


I was terrified when Kasia told mi that is north.
North to północ, ale jako kierunek geograficzny.
Północ jako 24 - midnight
I was terrified when Kasia told me it was midnight already.

I told Kasia that I have to go and ran to the home.
I told Kasia that I have to go and I ran to the home.

My parents were waiting for me, they were worried and angry.
Martwili się o Ciebie, a byli źli, że nie wróciłeś przed umówioną godziną.
My parents were waiting for me. They were worried about me and angry at me at the same time. albo They were worried and angry at the same time.

I apologized them for my late, but dad forbid me from home for a week.
I apologized them for being late but my dad didn't want to let me go out for a week.
albo
I apologized them for being late but my dad prohibited me going out for a week anyway.

Now, when I'm getting from the house parents remind me, that i get back on the hour. 
Every time when I'm going out my parents remind me that I have to get back home in time.