1. Przekształć tekst tak, aby uniknąć powtórzeń oraz do każdego z wymienionych miejsc dopisz kilka określeń (wymienione miejsca:Statue of Liberty, the Brooklyn Bridge, Central Park, the Empire State Building, the World Trade Centre, City Hall, Carnegie Hall, the New York Stock Exchange, Broadway, Yankee Stadium)
2. Napisz komentarz dotyczący oceny MODELU A wg kryteriów maturalnych.
MODEL A
New Yor is a very big city and lots of people live there. Lots of people go to see New York when they go on holiday.
There is a lot to see in New York. You can see the Statue of Liberty, the Brooklyn Bridge, Central Park, the Empire State Building, the World Trade Centre, City Hall, Carnegie Hall and the New York Stock Exchange. You can also go to Broadway and Yankee Stadium. If you don't want to see any of those you can just walk around. You can also go to a restaurant or a bar or a nightclub.
New York is very big. It has got a lot of cars and buildings and a lot of people. New York also has a lot of roads and noise.
New York is a very nice city and everyone loves it very much. Everyone must go to New York becouse it is good and you can see everything there.
KRYTERIA OCENY MATURALNEJ Z PRACY PISEMNEJ Z ANGIELSKIEGO:
max punktów : 18
1.CONTENT - max punktów:5 (treść pracy)
(uzasadnij (oczywiście po angielsku) dlaczego przyznałeś tyle punktów napisz co najmniej 5 zdań na temat tego co Ci się spodobało, a co nie w treści pracy)
2.STRUCTURE - max punktów:4 (struktura: akapity, ich proporcje itp.)
(uzasadnij dlaczego tyle punktów)
3.RANGE - max punktów:5 (bogactwo słownictwa i struktur gramatycznych)
(uzasadnij dlaczego tyle punktów)
4. ACCURANCY max punktów:4 (poprawność językowa)
(nie trzeba uzasadniać, ponieważ tekst jest brany z książki więc jest poprawny 4/4 pkt.)
Błagam o pomoc i oczywiście dam naj ;>
Określenia do miejsc rozumiem, że mają być w tekście? ^^
"and" i "the" się powtarzają, ale to chyba nie powinno być problemem... jeśli byłoby to konieczne, możesz za "and" wstawić po prostu przecinki a "the" pominąć (poza pierwszym) ;)
Mam nadzieję, że się przyda.
1.
New York is a very big city with many citizens. Lots of people go to see it when they have their holiday.
There is a lot to see in this spot in the world. You can find here the sign of liberty, the powerful and straight standing Statue of Liberty, the long and beautiful at night Brooklyn Bridge, the very big and green Central Park, the tall and estetic Empire State Building, also the tall and symbolic World Trade Centre, the heart of New York, nicely built City Hall, one of the most prestigious concert halls in the world - the Carnegie Hall and the famous and well-known New York Stock Exchange. You may also see the wide avenue called Broadway and the huge and gigantic Yankee Stadium. If you don't want to see any of those you can just walk around. It's possible alsto to go to a restaurant, bar or a nightclub.
New York is very big. You can find here a lot of cars, buildings and a lot of people. It has a lot of roads and noise though.
It's a beautiful city and everybody loves it very much. Everyone must go to New York becouse it is good and you can see everything there.
2.
1) Content - 4 points - I gave 4 points becouse this work gives us many information about New York. Every important thing that we can see there is mentioned. The autor tells us also some information about how it is to live there. But we can't really tell if it is worth living there - we know only that tourists love it. That is why I gave one point less than max.
2) Structur - 2 points - I gave 4 points becouse the text has clearly four paragraphs and the proportions are well-made.
3) Range - 3 points - I gave three points becouse the vocabulary isnt the richest and some words are often being repeated.
4) 4 points - text from the book :D