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Proszę o sprawdzenie wypracowania. Once upon a time I decided to spent my holiday in Spain.. I made a decision to forgot about quarrel with my best friend and went to camp. I found interesting offer on the Internet. I was terrified and excited at the same time because I had never taken part in the organized package tour. When I was ridding to the hotel I was admiring beautiful views. It turned out than my best friend live in the same hotel and her room is opposite to mine. We had not seen each other for 3 months so I did not even say “hi”. Week in Spain was amazing. I usually spent evenings with one boy whom I met at the party. He was tall men with blond hair and beautiful eyes. He had great sense of humor and I really liked him. Due to him I forgot about my problems. One day I met my best friend and she asked that she wanted to talk with me. We explained everything and I discovered one curious thing. This boy dated with both of us so we made a plan. I called to him and said that I wanted to see him at the party. Then my friend showed up with glass of wine. He looked confused. This boy started to explain and before he knew the big stain of wine was on his t-shirt. This trip was amazing and I am glad that I make up with friend.

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Once upon a time I decided to spent my holiday in Spain.. I made a decision to forget about the quarrel with my best friend and went to camp. I found an interesting  offer on  the Internet. I was terrified and excited at the same time, because I had never taken part in the organized package tour. When I was ridding to the hotel I was admiring  beautiful views. It turned out that my best friend was living in the same hotel and her room is opposite to mine. We had not seen each other for 3 months so I did not even say “hi”. The week in Spain was amazing. I usually spent the evenings with one boy whom I met at the party. He was a tall men with blond hair and beautiful eyes. He had great sense of humor and I really liked him. Thanks  to him I forgot about my problems. One day I met my best friend and she asked  to talk with me. We explained everything and I discovered one curious thing. This boy was dating with both of us so we made a revange plan. I called to him and said that I wanted to see him at the party. Then my friend showed up with a glass of wine. He looked confused. The boy started to explain and before he realised  the big spot /stain of wine appeared  on his t-shirt. This trip was amazing and I am glad that I make up with my friend.