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I spent my holidays with my family. We had really good time this year. In July I went to Chorzów with my brother and his friends. It was a one day's journey but we had a lot of fun. We visited a funfair.

In August I visited Sopot. I went there with my mum. We wanted to swim and sunboth but the weather was bad so We were spending time in a hotel. It was cold so I could only walk along the seaside. In my opinion, It's better to spend the holidays abroad. In Italy, for example. If I have a money, I'll go there next year.

I also visited my dad. He lives close to me, but we don't see often. My parents are divorced and their relationship isn't good, so I'm glad of visiting him.

The end of holidays I was spending with my friends. It was the best, and the most interesting, but I'm glad of coming to school.

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       I spent my holidays with my family. We had really good time this year. In July I went to Chorzów with my brother and his friends. It was one day journey but we had a lot of fun. We visited a funfair.

In August I visited Sopot. I went there with my mother. We wanted to swim and take a sunbath but the weather was bad so we had spend time in a hotel.It was so cold that we could only walk along the seaside.

      In my opinion, It's better to spend the holidays abroad. For example,if I had a money I would go to Greace  or Italy next year. 

I also visited my dad. He lives close to me, but we don't see often. My parents are divorced and their relationship isn't good, so I'm glad of visiting him.

The end of holidays I was spending with my friends. It was the best time of that holidays, and the most interesting.Anyway I'm glad of coming to school.

 

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